Hi,
I'd like to edit your novel. I would use track changes and offer comment. What you attached has about 80,000 words. I could bid less.
I'm a university-educated native English speaker. I have lots of experience - writing, editing, teaching creative writing & doing manuscript consultations.
Please see my reviews on my profile page and if you'd like me to send you a list of books I've edited, or links to my work online, I can do that.
Thanks.